The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The chart represents the percentage of
tourists
at a particular holiday resort in Australia taken place. And it includes different activities.
Overall
, there was
tourist
Add an article
a tourist
show examples
by
Change preposition
from
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4 different
region
Change to a plural noun
regions
show examples
of origin namely, Asia, Europe,
US
Correct article usage
the US
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, and Other. Asian
tourists
stayed
Wrong verb form
stay
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for about 7
days
in a most popular 5-star hotel
accomadations
Correct your spelling
accommodation
and their main activity is sightseeing. European
tourists
stayed for longer
days
than the others by 16
days
. They took their
accomadation
Correct your spelling
accommodation
in camping or caravan. European
people
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people's
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main purpose is to swim or
sunbathing
Wrong verb form
sunbathe
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. American
tourists
Change noun form
tourist's
tourists'
show examples
main activity is
same
Correct article usage
the same
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as
the
Correct determiner usage
that
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Asian
Change preposition
of Asian
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tourists
. US
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
average length of stay is about 14
days
and they choose
4-star
Add an article
a 4-star
the 4-star
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hotel
Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
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for their
accomadation
Correct your spelling
accommodation
.
Tourists
from other regions stay
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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for 10
days
and they decided to
accomadate
Correct your spelling
accommodate
as same as the Europeans. Surfing is considered to be the main activity for the other
region
Change noun form
region's
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people.
Therefore
, European
tourists
Change noun form
tourist's
tourists'
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period of stay
is
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
the highest and the least
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
Asian
tourists
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, days with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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