Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many of the world’s major cities. Explain some possible reasons for this problem, and suggest some solutions.

Nowadays, most of the people from rural
countries
and areas move to big
cities
looking for better opportunities.
City
life in developed
countries
is better compared to life in remote destinations
due to
various benefits. Tourism developments, Better employment opportunities, higher standards of education, living standards, financial stability and social advantages are some of the reasons for urbanisation. In my aspect, urbanisation is the most common problem for
traffic
congestion in many major
cities
.
Due to
financial and political instability in many developing
countries
, most of the Individuals tend to move to another
country
or a
city
for their betterment.
For instance
, the reason why a student from a third-world
country
wants to invest in a standard higher education in a developed
country
is because quality of the education those
countries
provide. They believe it can be value added to their career life rather than doing a local course or a degree in their nation.
Therefore
, thousands of students move to different
cities
around the world and it causes
infastructure-related
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infrastructure-related
issues
mainly
traffic
and transport-related problems. Arrivals of a higher number of tourists and overpopulation in the
cities
are
also
another reason for
traffic
issues
.
On the other hand
, even though urbanisation can benefit the economy of that
city
or the
country
, it is not always practical to face
traffic
congestion daily basis.
Traffic
congestion is another reason for the reduction in air quality which can lead to air pollution and a huge threat to
bio diversity
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.
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my perspective, it is paramount that these
issues
are addressed and can be mitigated by introducing a proper
traffic
management system. People should be encouraged to travel by public transport
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therefore
public transport must be developed in a way it's more comfortable and less expensive for passengers to travel around rather than travelling in their personal vehicle.
Furthermore
, improving facilities
such
as parks and rides, and introducing E-bike can control
traffic
problems and
as well as
reduce environmental impacts. In
conclusion
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as in my suggestion, the government or the municipal council should take necessary actions addressing
such
issues
before welcoming more people to their
city
. The amenities and infrastructure should be developed in a way to reduce these types of
issues
. A
city
should be pleasant and easy to live in and should not feel like living in hell.
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