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n many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, it is true that international
tourism
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 income
have
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bacome
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become
 a significant source
for
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of
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domestic
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the domestic
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 budget in many countries.
While
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 international
tourism
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 can help
national
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the national
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economy
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 prosperous, I deem that it has more negatives than benefits if a
country
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 over-reliance on it. On the one hand, I agree that guests from other countries can help local economic growth. From a personal perspective, enormous
vistors
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visitors
 result in good sales, which can help residents earn enough money to consume what they like,
imporving
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improving
 their living
strandard
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standard
standards
. From
social
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 level, foreign
vistors
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visitors
also
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 have
contribut
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contributed
 to
reduce
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 the unemployment rate in many countries.
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 is mainly because if a
country
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 wants to become
a
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 attractive destination for national tourists, it is essential to provide
a
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 engaging
server
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 for them, which means hotels and scenic spots in
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country
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 need to employ more labour.
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, we can't ignore the jeopardize if a
country
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 mainly
realys
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relays
relies
 on international
tourism
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 and gives up other economic sources.
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, taking international
tourism
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 as a pivotal source of income will lead to a single economic structure which is too simple to address major international
emergency
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.
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 Thailand,
for example
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,
this
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country
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 is a famous travel destination around the world and its national budget mainly depends on international tourists, so the breakout of COVID-19
decreases
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 the number of travelers leading to a serious
ecnomic
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economic
 crisis in Thailand.
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, addicting to develop national travel may make the administrator in a
country
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ignores
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 the importance of prosperous industries which are usually considered as the backbone of a
country
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's
economy
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. In summary,
although
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 international
tourism
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 may bring some benefits to
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country's
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a country's
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economy
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, I still believe it has more disadvantages than
mreits
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merits
 considering the aftereffect of
frail
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the frail
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 domestic
economy
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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