n many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, it is true that international
tourism
income
have
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bacome
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become
a significant source
for
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domestic
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budget in many countries.
While
international
tourism
can help
national
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economy
prosperous, I deem that it has more negatives than benefits if a
country
over-reliance on it. On the one hand, I agree that guests from other countries can help local economic growth. From a personal perspective, enormous
vistors
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visitors
result in good sales, which can help residents earn enough money to consume what they like,
imporving
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improving
their living
strandard
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standard
standards
. From
social
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level, foreign
vistors
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visitors
also
have
contribut
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contributed
to
reduce
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the unemployment rate in many countries.
This
is mainly because if a
country
wants to become
a
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attractive destination for national tourists, it is essential to provide
a
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engaging
server
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for them, which means hotels and scenic spots in
this
country
need to employ more labour.
However
, we can't ignore the jeopardize if a
country
mainly
realys
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relays
relies
on international
tourism
and gives up other economic sources.
Firstly
, taking international
tourism
as a pivotal source of income will lead to a single economic structure which is too simple to address major international
emergency
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.
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Thailand,
for example
,
this
country
is a famous travel destination around the world and its national budget mainly depends on international tourists, so the breakout of COVID-19
decreases
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the number of travelers leading to a serious
ecnomic
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economic
crisis in Thailand.
Additionally
, addicting to develop national travel may make the administrator in a
country
ignores
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the importance of prosperous industries which are usually considered as the backbone of a
country
's
economy
. In summary,
although
international
tourism
may bring some benefits to
country's
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economy
, I still believe it has more disadvantages than
mreits
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merits
considering the aftereffect of
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the frail
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domestic
economy
.
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