Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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budgets are used
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. I contend that
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money
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should be invested in improving citizens' life of all over the
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due to
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hunger and
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crisis, despite those who
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that spending on
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research
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would increase the capacity for farming and power utilization. It should be acknowledged that improvements in
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has
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increased people's lives all over the
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.
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,
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hunger is still one of the biggest
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that the UN officials have to deal with and finance is a main factor for
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. By spending the income for
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research
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, food and methods of agriculture would be implanted and
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would alleviate the rates of starvation all around the
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significantly.
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, there would be more economic boost for the
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as hunger is not a dramatic problem any longer.
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,
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insufficient is
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a pain in the back for UN authorities.
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green
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is a possible
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, the main
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source is still fossil fuels and they are on
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verge of being completely exhausted in the future.
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, the
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used for exploring
space
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should be used to apply more green
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plant
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to save the fuels and protect the ozone layer from the exhaust they emit.
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,
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would save a lot of
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for investors in the future as they would not have to
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money
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on
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program. Critics
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always
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justified
that there would be more benefits in spending on
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research
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. They argue that the land is now being polluted by factories and vehicles and finding new land and new
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of
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would solve the problem.
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point has credibility, but if major
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can not be solved through
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that has been wasted for years it could become worse.
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, if recent
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could not be solved,
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would increase to a larger scale where it couldn't
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by
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any longer.
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money
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are
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spent on
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exploring
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for the 'greater good', proponents including me
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the idea
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budgets should be spent on starvation and
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of
energy
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as there is still no major achievement of
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of outer
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without having the
problems
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is now being resolved.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific discoveries
  • cutting-edge technology
  • pioneering research
  • socio-economic development
  • improved healthcare
  • education
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • cost-effective
  • prioritize
  • allocate
  • resources
  • budget
  • investment
  • sustainable development
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