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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Many individuals think that their government should have
a
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free
health
care
.
If
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this
 means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the
service
 because they are too expensive. In
this
easay
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essay
, I will show the reason why
i
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 disagree with
this
 statement and give the second face to
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this
 opinion which
make
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 me
dont
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not
 agree. First of all,
health
care
 is very in many countries, the MD doctors have a high salary, if the government pay for people who live in
this
 country, it will be a big problem because we
dont
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don't
 know how many people
who
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use
this
service
everyday
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.
Moreover
, in many big cities,
the
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foreign patients usually go
to
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there to use the healthcare
sevice
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service
 of
this
 country for many reasons, if we have a free
health
service
, the
foreign
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 patients will
be increase
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 a lot. If it
come
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 to real,
the
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 big problem will
be appear
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 and the
consequency
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consequence
consequences
is
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 so
terrified
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terrifying
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. Currently, many poor people
dont
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don't
 have enough money to go to the hospital. They
cant
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can't
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 find the solution to take
care
their
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of their
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health
 when the problem is
comming
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coming
.
Moreover
, if they have serious
sick
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, the price for resolving their
health
, and they will problems in
economy
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 and
health
both
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. In my opinion, free
health
care
 is not a good idea, because the government have to spend a lot of money
for
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 it.
Moreover
,
it
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 is
lack
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a lack
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 of motivation
for improving
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 medical
health
service
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services
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 for the country in the future. In
concluding
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, healthcare should be spent money on,
cause
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because
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 it
create
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creates
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 a huge motivation to develop the national medical
care
 of any
countries
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country
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 in the world.

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