The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the proportion of the
inhabitants
senior citizens in a hundred years in three various countries.
Change to a genitive case
inhabitant's
inhabitants'
Overall
, the USA and Sweden increasingly rose while
Japan
decreased over the period given .At the start of the period USA grow
steadily in 1940 and reached up to 15% in the Wrong verb form
grew
year
1980-1990. Fix the agreement mistake
years
Then
USA maintained a constant low indicates
in the year 2020 . It is hoped to be doubled and reach nearly 25% in 2040 . In Verb problem
apply
Sweden
the percentage of aged people grew from about 7% in 2040 to 15% in 2000, Add a comma
Sweden,
is
heavily towards 25% in 2040 Correct pronoun usage
which is
while
Japan
from 1960 to 2030 it remained below 5 percent . A glance at the graph makes it clear that Change preposition
in Japan
Japan
will have more
percentage of the aged population in the future despite its Correct word choice
a higher
less
percentage of Correct word choice
lower
this
population in the early 40s .
The line graph clearly opens
that all of the three countries will increase in 2040 and Verb problem
shows
Japan
will take the first place.Submitted by aiaulymqasymzhanqyzy on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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