The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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diagram
showcases
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the process of how
bees
can make honey.
Overall
, there are seven main steps. The first
step
happens within the beehive. Worker
bees
prepare themselves for their regular trip to nature to extract
pollen
from the
flowers
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their route. Once the
bees
go outside of their beehive in the hunt for blooming
flowers
, it means that we have already reached
step
two. In the third
step
, we will find the
bees
resting upon
flowers
. During
this
step
, the
bees
are extracting
pollen
and nectar that are produced by the
flowers
.
Pollen
is a powder-like substance,
whereas
nectar is a sweet liquid excreted by the
flowers
. The
bees
then
flutter back to their hive with the
pollen
and
flowers
in their possession. Steps four to six all occur within the reins of the hive. Upon arriving back to their home, the
bees
will
then
store the extraction in these hexagon-shaped organisms. The next
step
,
this
being the fifth, will be when the
bees
flutter their wings on top of the hexagon containers,
hence
providing an air current of sorts to process the
pollen
and nectar
further
.
Then
,
on
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the sixth
step
, liquid (mostly from the water) will go through a process of evaporation, and with
that
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leaving a thick substance that we know as honey. The
last
step
would be the extraction of honey from the beehives. The extraction would
then
be transferred to small jars and
then
distributed to the market.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bees, step, pollen, flowers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Metamorphosis
  • Nectar
  • Foraging
  • Pollination
  • Worker bees
  • House bees
  • Honey stomach
  • Honeycomb cells
  • Beeswax
  • Evaporation
  • Hexagon-shaped
  • Simple sugars
  • Enzymes
  • Capping
  • Preserve
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