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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates Norbiton which is an industrial region at the moment, and the version of the planned
future
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 development. factory.
Current
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The current
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 situation of the area is only composed of factories both near the centre and the river.
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, in
the
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apply
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future
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 developments,
this
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 place will include public places
for instance
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 kindergarten,
school
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a school
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, shops and a medical centre. Norbiton includes a long and narrow river, located at the North side of the region,
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however
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 the place is empty now, in the
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future
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future,
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 it will be surrounded by houses which could be reached by passing a bridge, which will
also
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 be built in the
future
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. The
north west
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northwest
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 side surged in deforestation and housing
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south
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the south
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 of Norbiton is going to be filled with shops in order to maintain the demands of locals. Current factories are mostly gathered on the east side of the region
where
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which
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it
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apply
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continues ahead in
this
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 direction, in
fact
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fact,
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 the planned
future
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 development showed us that the factories will be replaced with housing after construction.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words future with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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