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Write a letter to a friend inviting them to go on vacation with you. Include Why you want to go on holiday Where you want to go Why you want them to come with you

#friend #vacation #holiday
I hope you are well long time
no see
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since we saw
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 each other I
take
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am taking
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 15 days off from work I was planning to travel to Japan as I remember that our dream was
visit
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to visit
visiting
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 Japan to try new things and I heard that it is
beautiful
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a beautiful
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 city to visit especially Tokyo . I have
been
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seen
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see
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apply
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our photos in Korea and many memories back to me and I would thank you for
this
 memory we were happy
that
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at that
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 time
therefore
 I would like to travel to Japan again with you as well.
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, it would be
grateful
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great
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to
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for
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 us to back our
friendships
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friendship
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 it
was
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has been
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 6 Months
we
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since we
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did not see
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saw
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 each other so it is
chance
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a chance
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 to travel together and
know
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learn
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 about everything in our life . I am going to reserve tickets beginning 01 of August till 15 of August if you have any questions please let me know
also
 the rest of
things
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the things
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just let
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will be
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me
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apply
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handle
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handled
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. I appreciate your time. Thank you. Yours faithfully,
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coherence cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structure and use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the coherence and cohesion of your writing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your greeting and closing match the formal tone of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea and be well-developed.
task achievement
Your response adequately addresses the task and includes the necessary information.
lexical resource
Consider using more specific and descriptive language to enhance your lexical resource.
grammatical range
Work on improving your grammatical range and accuracy to avoid errors.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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