The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country.

The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country.
The line graph illustrates
daily
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the daily
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food people eats, for three
kind
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kinds
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of food, Margarine, Fat,
Butter
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and Butter
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between 1981 and 2007 in
unknown
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an unknown
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country.
Firstly
, the green line shows
butter
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the butter
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rated
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rate
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declined
start
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starting
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with
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at
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140 grams in 1981 to reach
to
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apply
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around 40. Move to the second one ,
blue
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the blue
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color mentions
for
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apply
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margarine food by fluctuations number
begin
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beginning
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with nearly 100
KG
than
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then
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stay
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staying
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at the same number
100
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of 100
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from 1991 to 1996 after that decreased to the lowest number
40
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of 40
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KG
.
At
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In
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the end, people
starts
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started
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to
eating
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eat
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low fat
from
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in
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1996 and
grams
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the grams
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growing
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grew
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to 80
kg
at
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in
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2001
than
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then
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slightly dropped to below 80
kg
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • daily
  • per person
  • 1981 to 2007
  • country
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
  • relatively
  • steadily
  • significant
  • consumed
  • gap
  • narrowed
  • overtake
  • popular choice
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