The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country.
The line graph illustrates
daily
food people eats, for three Correct article usage
the daily
kind
of food, Margarine, Fat, Change to a plural noun
kinds
Butter
between 1981 and 2007 in Correct word choice
and Butter
unknown
country.
Add an article
an unknown
Firstly
, the green line shows Linking Words
butter
Correct article usage
the butter
rated
declined Wrong verb form
rate
start
Wrong verb form
starting
with
140 grams in 1981 to reach Change preposition
at
to
around 40.
Move to the second one , Change preposition
apply
blue
color mentions Correct article usage
the blue
for
margarine food by fluctuations number Change preposition
apply
begin
with nearly 100 Wrong verb form
beginning
KG
Use synonyms
than
Correct your spelling
then
stay
at the same number Wrong verb form
staying
100
from 1991 to 1996 after that decreased to the lowest number Change preposition
of 100
40
Change preposition
of 40
KG
.
Use synonyms
Linking Words
At
the end, people Change the preposition
In
starts
to Wrong verb form
started
eating
low fat Wrong verb form
eat
from
1996 and Change preposition
in
grams
Correct article usage
the grams
growing
to 80 Wrong verb form
grew
kg
Use synonyms
at
2001 Change preposition
in
than
slightly dropped to below 80 Replace the word
then
kg
.Use synonyms
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