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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: •explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months •say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Sir, Hope you are doing well.
This
 is to inform you regarding my willingness to get a
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 assessment exposure in our Canadian office for six months. I appreciate your kind consideration in
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 understanding
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 my
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. As you know, my MBA dissertation is related
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 the analysis of the business model in various locations of our company, it is mandatory for me to get
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real exposure to the business operations in the local context of Canada.
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 experience there. In relation to the current job responsibilities of my role, I have already spoken to
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 Sugath as to how the work can be split between myself and him
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 so that I can manage it
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 provided his consent to undertake the suggested tasks and soon I will share the agreed plan with you.
Finally
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formal approval in written form from your end to be submitted to
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 office to arrange by Visa, it
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 highly appreciated if you could provide the relevant letter within the next week if possible. Thank you in advance for your extended support in granting permission and giving me the support to utilize my expertise in a foreign country. Yours sincerely, Tharinda
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Provide a clearer justification for why working in the company's head office is beneficial for your MBA dissertation on the analysis of the business model.
coherence
Use appropriate formal language and tone throughout the letter.
coherence
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