The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In contemporary society,

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science

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advances in every

aspects

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human’s

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lives

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undeniable.

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, the urgent demand for more substantial discoveries and innovations for the improvement and convenience of

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apply

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human

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humans

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and the earth is more tangible than

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other time worldwide

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this

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essay I will explain

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, tremendous medical revolutionary solutions have been introduced by

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advancements,

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many people owe their

life

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that

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, I believe that

science

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could take more effective steps in curing untreated illnesses that have

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remained incurable up to now.

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, to eradicate various cancers or MS, there have not been found any permanent medical solutions,

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a myriad of people are currently struggling with heart-rending symptoms of their illnesses.

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, enjoying a tranquil life without excruciating pain for patients would be achievable, if more efficient measures are discovered

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the help of

science

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, in terms of

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the Earth and the

human’s

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lives

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have

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had

appreciable

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role. To illustrate

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tanks

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to the

science

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seeding clouds results in artificial rain that has not only rescued widespread lands from drought

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but

also

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converted them to fertile and productive farms.

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, vast areas of the Earth

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uninhabitable for all creatures.

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, global warming and climate change have become

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phenomenon that significantly requires scientific interactions more urgently. In conclusion,

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science

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has had substantial impacts in improving life situation, over time increasing demands for its help is needed. Dependency on

science

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is incomparable with any other thing in the world,

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trying assiduously to attain more

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is vital.

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Coherence and Cohesion

You have done quite well in structuring your essay. The introduction sets up the argument clearly, and there is a conclusion that summarizes your points. However, work a bit more on improving the flow of your ideas, ensuring each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource

You have a good command of vocabulary and use a range of vocabulary; however, there are a couple of occasions where words are not used correctly (e.g. 'tanks' instead of 'thanks'). Be sure to proofread your work before submitting.

Task Response

Your response is fully relevant and extended, and you have developed some excellent, convincing ideas and provided some apt examples; well done! However, there is still room for expanding the depth of your analysis.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

You've used a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, showing your ability to express ideas using different grammatical structures. However, there are still minor errors that you need to watch out for, as well as areas where you could better utilize complex sentence structures.

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1
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

264 words

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advancements
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healthcare
scientific research
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improving living standards
global issues
climate change
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technological advancements
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negative consequences
ethical considerations
sustainability
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