A hundred years ago, people think that human race is steadily improving in every area of life. Now it semms this is not certain in that situation. In which area do you thnik we have made important progress now a days ? in which area do you think we still nedd to make progress?

A century ago, individuals held the belief that the human race tend to be consistently processing in all aspects of life
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in the technologies and medical field.
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and in which departments we have made development already. To commence with, it has to be highlighted that new technologies are continuously
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by the masses
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, that provide huge marvellous benefits to everyone. What is more, If scientists were
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genre models of
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people who can not drive sufficiently .
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better living styles and their goals.
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people
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lifestyles for twenty century. On the other side, some
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need to be
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like in
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sectors
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and education departments.
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new machines have
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a few places have not available
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types of machines.
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developed where more than half
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workers work
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without using new devices.
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have
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where girls are not educated
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places
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government and human
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should focus more as it offers a lot of fruitful advantages to
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mankind
. To recapitulate, some areas have been developed by new devices so that people are growing day by day
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by
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scientists. In my opinion, If politics will help in
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of every field
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every
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will progress more in their country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breakthrough
  • innovations
  • revolutionize
  • cutting-edge
  • state-of-the-art
  • pioneering
  • remarkable
  • transformative
  • significantly
  • tremendous
  • improvements
  • pandemics
  • vaccines
  • preventive measures
  • life expectancy
  • literacy rate
  • accessibility
  • equal opportunities
  • inclusion
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • ecosystem preservation
  • mental health
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