The top priority of bussiness is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Many companies focus on finding
budget
, but they Correct article usage
a budget
do
not Verb problem
are
interesting
in communities. In my opinion, I think that Replace the word
interested
business
should to making income and taking care of communities too. Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
This
essay will discuss about
Remove the preposition
apply
this
statement, and I will give reasons to support about
my ideas.
On the one hand, making income is very important for companies because Change preposition
apply
employment
need Replace the word
employees
money
to
management Change preposition
for
such
as paying salary
to Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
staffs
, they must Fix the agreement mistake
staff
to
spend Change the verb form
apply
money
to produce new products. For example
, restaurants must to
spend Change the verb form
apply
money
to
Change preposition
on
Add an article
the employer
employer
, and Replace the word
employees
buying
the Wrong verb form
buy
stuffs
to prepare Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
foods
. So, if they do not have Fix the agreement mistake
food
money
, they
business will close. I believe that Correct pronoun usage
their
employment
need to Replace the word
employees
making
Change the verb
make
money
because they have many to spend likes
facilities.
Replace the word
like
On the other hand
, sociable
is very common to us too Add a missing verb
being sociable
likes
humans around the world must Wrong verb form
like
to
have a good environment. Change the verb form
apply
Thus
, if many businessmen only prefer to get income and they don't think about people
lives and nature, Change noun form
people's
this
action will be bad for humans such
as they will live in bad pollution. For instance
, the
carbon dioxide has been increasing because of Correct article usage
apply
Add an article
the factory
a factory
factory
that they need to save Correct your spelling
factors
money
to reduce it. Therefore
, I believe that business
need to think about social life too.
Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
To sum up
, I surely agree that both of
Change preposition
apply
money
and social responsibilities are very important for us, and I believe that if employment prefer
to think about two things together is Change the verb form
prefers
very
better way to Add an article
a very
the very
development
because we will have a good nature and we will have an economic.Replace the word
develop
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