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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns ad cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #ad #cities
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A glance at a line graph provided reveals the figure
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 medical care in three European countries,counted in
percent
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,from 1960 to 2000.
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,almost all data experienced a
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up ward
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 trend except for that of clothing In terms of the amount of food,despite having the highest starting point at over 30 in1960,
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 number declined dramatically to approximately 13 after 40 years. As for the data
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 leisure,commencing at precisely 20,the drop sharply to over 10 in 2000. With respect to the amount of clothing and means of transport,
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 they had
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 uniform initial point at around 10,they had different
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trend
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.The former observed a rapid
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 to 15 which is the highest in 2000.Meanwhile the latter slid away drastically to exactly 5 With regard to the number of energy,it plunged from 5 to nearly 0 after a 40-year period of time.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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