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The pie charts demonstrate the statistics about the local authorities in Someland of six categories spent per annual in 1980-1990 and 2000

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The pie charts demonstrate the statistics about the local
authorities
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 in Someland of six categories spent per annual in 1980-1990 and 2000
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 and reduced their proportions over thirty years with the exception of those local
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authorities
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 environmental services. The latter retained the smallest fraction on the charts,
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higher education continued to be
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 active local
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authorities
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. It is
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 that
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 that Someland k-12 Education annual
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 dramatically decreased from 25per
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cent
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 to 18 per
cent
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 in 1980-2000. A similar pattern can be observed for others,
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 declined by five per
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 to reach six per
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 in 1980
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. It is worth mentioning that
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the lowest
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 in
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.
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, transportation
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 in front of
authorities
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 by the close of the period as their rate dropped from sixteen per
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 to six per
cent
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. And in
1990
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year
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,
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 decreased in 2000year. the opposite trend can be noted for those at the transportation. Interestingly,
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 figure was identical to that of
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 and Human Resources in 1990
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