the charts below show the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

the charts below show the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
The first line chart above illustrates the ownership change of electric appliances and the second shows the allocation of time needed for house chores being done from 1920 to 2019 in an unknown country.
Overall
, everyone had
vacuum
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a vacuum
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cleaner, washing machine, and refrigerator at their home in 2019 even though a century ago usage of these appliances
is
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was
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below 45%. With increases in technology usage, hours of housework spent per week
declining
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declined
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gradually. In 1920, almost no one had
the
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a
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refrigerator at home but
this
behaviour changed dramatically to 50% in 1940.
However
,
this
trend kept rising to 90% in 1960 and had a peak at 100% in 1980
follows
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following
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the next 40 years. Vacuum cleaner,
nevertheless
, 30% of
citizen
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citizens
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already had been using it in 1920. There
has been
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was
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steady growth in
following
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a following
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year
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years
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almost 55% in 1940, had been utilized 90% in 1960 and after 1980
it's
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it was
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impossible for everyone
for
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apply
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not
having
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to have
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vacuum
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a vacuum
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cleaner. 40% of
household
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households
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managed to use washing
machine
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machines
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in 1920. It rose to 70% in 1960 and dropped
at
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to
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nearly 65% before it increased to around 72% in 2019.
Moreover
, all these
technology
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technological
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invention
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inventions
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makes the time allocation for house chores
decreasing
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decrease
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. In 1920, half time of a week
spent
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was spent
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for
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on
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domestic labour.
Thus
,
this
trend has dropped steadily by nearly 35% in 1940 and
continue
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continued
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to decline in 2019 at around 10%.
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