The below chart gives information the data of immigration, emigration and net migration in UK between 1999 and 2008.

The below chart gives information the data of immigration, emigration and net migration in UK between 1999 and 2008.
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The chart shows the migration data in the
UK
from 1999 to 2008, consisting of immigration and emigration in the line chart and net migration in the bar chart.
Overall
, the
number
of immigrants and emigration simultaneously rose,
whereas
the net migration fluctuated over a 10-year period. In 1999, the
number
of immigrants who entered the
UK
stood at around 459
thousand
, followed by a slow increase until 2003,
then
a dramatic incline happened in 2004 to almost 600
thousand
people.
Consequently
, The
number
of immigrants leaving for the
UK
reached a peak in 2006 at 600
thousand
and continued to level off around the latest
number
.
On the other hand
, the
number
of people leaving the
UK
were
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just under 300
thousand
in the late 1990s and remained growing until 2003 to nearly 400
thousand
of
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people.
In contrast
to the immigration condition in 2004, the
number
of emigrants fell to about 350
thousand
. The amount of emigrants returned to the 2004 level after reaching its temporary highest in 2006 at 400
thousand
.
Finally
, the
number
of emigrants soared to just above 400
thousand
in 2008.
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