the charts below show the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

the charts below show the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
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disgrams
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diagrams
below demonstrate that, from 1920 to 2019, in one country, the differences in how many percentages of electrical appliances were used in households, including washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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,
as well as
how much time
pepole
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people
spent doing
housework
, including washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning.
Overall
, the
percentage
of households with three electrical appliances increased
while
the number of hours of
housework
per household decreased during the 100 years. As for the use of electrical
appliance
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appliances
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using
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,
it is clear that
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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became
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have become
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more and more popular in
this
country as the
percentage
of
household
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households
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using it increased
most
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the most
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. The
percentage
of
vacumm
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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experienced a lower rate of
increasing
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during the 100 years than
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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but
finally
reached the same
percentage
as
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it
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.
In contrast
, the popularity of washing
machine
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machines
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experienced a little drop in 1960, which was the least in 2019. When it comes to the time people
spending
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in
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housework
, it decreased sharply at the
begining
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beginning
and
them
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then
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decreased slowly in the end. Combining
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, it
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that people spend less time
in
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doing
housework
becasue
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because
the
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electrical
appliance
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appliances
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become more common in their houses.
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