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Many people believe that it is better to learn something in group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

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Every person has their own way
to learn
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 about something, whether individually or by joining a study
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.
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, learning new skills
together with
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 other people has been considered as a better method than
self learning
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. It is because it is challenging to point out our own
weakness
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weaknesses
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 when we study alone.
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, joining a
group
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 study can be a solution since we
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 get many
feedbacks
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 from others. Studying in a
group
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 allows
the
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other people to make corrections about the mistakes we may have
done
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 in doing something. We may keep repeating the same mistake over and over because it is what we know as the correct way. Learning a foreign language may be a good example
for
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this
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 situation. The partners in a
group
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 will help us to figure out the
error
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errors
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spelling
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 or pronunciation when they
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a
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practice together. Another
benefits
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from
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 studying together is the chance to
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idea
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ideas
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 with others.
This
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 is good because brainstorming with others can generate
any
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ideas, tips, or
solution
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 when we find any difficulties or
struggling
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from
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 the learning process. We may not get useful suggestions from studying individually
,
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 unless we have a mentor/teacher to guide us. In conclusion, studying in a
group
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 offers some useful benefits to
individual
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individuals
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Besides
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 it helps us in finding our own mistakes, we may be able to get some useful suggestions from the brainstorming in a
group
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, I personally believe that someone can learn something faster and more
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by
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 a
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 than individually.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative environment
  • discussion
  • debate
  • exchange of ideas
  • critical soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • emotional and motivational support
  • isolating
  • personalized pace
  • efficient learning
  • self-discipline
  • accountability
  • educational progress
  • distractions
  • group dynamics
  • commitment
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