Child labour is considered to be one of the most serious problems on the planet. What are the reasons why children find themselves in child labour and what can be done to tackle this issue?

In
this
current time, teenagers who
work
in their daily life is one of the biggest problems that people are concerned about. Sometimes they are required to do
this
because they have no option and their parents do not think about these consequences. In
this
essay, I will explain more about the causes and some solutions to
this
issue.
To begin
with,
this
problem
happens mostly in developing countries. As we know, some families in developing countries have financial
problem
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and it makes children forced to
work
without considering the impact on their kids in the future. A survey by the Association Of Education in ASEAN shows that 80% of children in third-world countries do not take their school anymore because they have to
work
.
Moreover
, another reason is the tuition fee getting higher year by year, so parents prefer to push their kids into
work
and have no concern about education.
However
, there are several solutions that people can adopt to reduce the number of child labour.
Firstly
, the reduction of tuition
fee
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is the most important thing that
government
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can do, so people with financial difficulties can afford it.
Furthermore
, it even better if
government
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can
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make a school-free program that specifically addresses
to
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families with low economic income.
Secondly
,
government
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should have
the
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law about child labour so the
government
can
give
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punishment to the company that still accepting teenagers to
work
. In conclusion, child labour is one of the major
problem
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in
this
world and most of the reasons are related to economic
problem
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problems
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.
Nevertheless
, if
government
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has
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more
concern
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about it and can take some actions as the solutions, the number of
this
problem
can
turn
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down for a better life for our kids.
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