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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates data on
emigration
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 by British
people
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 to five countries
such
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 as Australia, Spain, New Zealand, the USA and France for 4 years starting in 2004 until 2007. The information is represented in thousands.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Australia was the number one option for
emigration
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 purposes,
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 New Zealand was the least preferred one, followed by the USA. If we analyze closely we can notice that 2006 was the year in which more than 50.000
people
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 emigrated from the UK to Australia, meanwhile, 2007 had the lowest record for British
emigration
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 with less than 20.000
people
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 travelling to France.
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, during 2004 the
emigration
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 rate to the countries of the USA, New Zealand and France was almost the same with 20.000
people
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whereas
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 for Spain, the rate of
emigration
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 was almost the same in 2004 as in 2005.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emigration, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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