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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph depicts the dynamics
in
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 three disguisable types of criminal activities in the
center
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 of Manchester City between 2003 and 2002.
Overall
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, It is obvious that Burglary experienced a downward trend
while
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 Car Theft increased gradually.
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, it can be seen that the number of Robberies remained constant through a decade despite some fluctuations. In regard to the given data, in 2023.Burglary stood at the highest position
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 approximately 3400 cases. After that, it peaked at around 3800 in the following year, 2004 before sharply dipping to just above 1000 cases in 2008. In 2009, the data went up to nearly 1500 and slightly decreased to about 1400
at the end
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 of 2012.
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, from 2003 to 2012, the number of car thieves witnessed a gradual increase from 2300 to 2750. Turning to Robbery, the number stabilized throughout
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 decade just by over 510.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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