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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.
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The procedure of brick production is
illusterated
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illustrated

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which is used in building construction.
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, elaborately does the whole operation
is consisted
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consists

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 of seven stages
involved
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involving

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 three main
level
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levels

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; digging, processing and delivering. First of all,as the first step the clay is diggied from the ground by a digger; in the following, a metal grid which is just above the roller,
seperates
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separates

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this
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 clay before mixing
with
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it with

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 water and salt. After that, in order to
shaping
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shape

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 them to create bricks, the producer uses a wire cutter or a mould. In the next stage, bricks must be dried
into
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in

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 an oven
at
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for at

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 least 24 hours, but not more than two days. Regarding the final stage of production, bricks are put in
kiln
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a kiln
the kiln

The noun phrase kiln seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 with the
intial
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initial

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temepreture
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temperature
temperatures

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around 200C; but, its
temeperatue
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temperature

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gradually increases up to 1300C. after spending two or three days in
cooling
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the cooling

The noun phrase cooling chamber seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 chamber, they are ready to be packed and
delevered
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delivered

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to the customers by trucks.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • digger
  • metal grid
  • debris
  • molded
  • wire cutter
  • drying ovens
  • firing process
  • kiln
  • cooling chamber
  • delivery
  • construction sites
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