Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grew or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is believed by some
people
that
fruits
and
vegetables
might be carried to some
countries
in which plants hardly grew or were not planted that fix with the process of
season
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by the state-of-the-art aircraft,
while
some
people
think it is not a good idea to do that. I have a mixed opinion, and in
this
essay, I will discuss both sides. It must be recognized that
fruits
and
vegetables
should be carried to some
countries
that have bad weather.
This
is because
,
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people
in some of that
countries
are dealing with the destruction by insects.
As a result
, when the harvest
come
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came
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, farmers did not have enough
fruits
and
vegetables
to use.
Therefore
, it is easy to understand why aircraft have been increasingly used to transport
fruits
and
vegetables
to some of
that
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those
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countries
.
However
, some
people
say that it is not a good idea to transport
fruits
and
vegetables
.
This
belief is based on the
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fruits
or
vegetables
.
For
this
reason, when
people
use it, it will have a negative effect on their health.
This
point may be true, but they still need
fruits
and
vegetables
to survive. In conclusion, aircraft should be used to transport
fruits
and
vegetables
to some poor
countries
where have bad weather.
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task response
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