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The chart shows the main reasons for study among students of different age groups.

The chart shows the main reasons for study among students of different age groups.
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The bar chart illustrates data pertaining to the primary purposes of study among learners of various
age
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 groups.
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, it can be seen that students choose to study for
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career
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a career
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 more than for
interest
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 with the exception of people aged 40 or over.
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, the younger showed a preference to learn for
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career
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a career
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,
while
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 the older
age
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 group was more interested in studying for
interest
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. Looking at the data more closely, it can be observed that over 60% of students aged under 16 to 29 studied for
career
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,
whereas
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 the figures for the same
age
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 group were much lower ranging from 10% to 15% for
interest
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, making
this
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 the most significant difference.
Similarly
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, the percentage of people learning for
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career
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a career
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 in the 30 and 89
age
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 group was higher than
interest
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 at just under 60% and approximately 25%, respectively. Moving onto the remaining data, learners aged 49 or over were more in favour of the studying reason for
interest
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 at exactly 70% than
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career
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 at roughly 19%.
In addition
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 to people aged between 40 and 49, their main purposes accounted for a similar proportion, at just over 41%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, career, interest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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