Millions of dollars are spent on space research evey year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that millions of dollars are spent on space exploration.
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it is a commonly held belief that the
government
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should improve living standards
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of spending on space research, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the
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must enhance the living standards on the earth.
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with, space exploration is a waste of time, effort and money.
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, a lot of
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that conducted by many countries and they spent millions of dollars on it, and
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they did not find anything.
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, they look for another place to be
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place for people
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of the earth.
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experts went to another planet in 2016 and he did not find any place, and there
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no gravity on it. Another point to consider, the
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should spend
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crucial sectors. It is
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possible to say that they should develop
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and
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technology in it to ensure
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its success.
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, they should invest in hospitals and make it free for all citizens.
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, if the
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invest in their internal sectors,
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citizens will not need to go abroad
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or
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. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I tend to believe that the authority should invest in sectors that will return to citizens,
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, health,
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and transportation
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • everyday life
  • global challenges
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  • natural disasters
  • resource management
  • scientific knowledge
  • future generations
  • educational growth
  • international collaboration
  • peace and unity
  • immediate issues
  • poverty
  • healthcare
  • urgent funding
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