The graph shows children by age group as a percentage of the young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001 ]

The graph shows children by age group as a percentage of the young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001

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The multi-line graph illustrates data regarding kids by
age
group among a proportion of the
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in the UK from 1990 to 2001. Generally speaking, it is readily apparent that the
overall
situation has dramatically increased in the considered time period, albeit with specific trends for each year. First off, the percentage of the aged 10-14 faced a steep and constant decrease from 1990 to 1993, which dropped by approximately 3%,
while
the other three
age
groups had a lightly increase. And
then
over the next four years, the
age
population aged 5 to 19 was slowly rising, but at the
age
of 5-9 was ranked
first,
with nearly 26%.
On the other hand
, from 1997 to 2001, the proportions of 10-14 and 15-19 years old saw a moderate growth, which both increased by 1%.
On the contrary
, there was a slight decline in the trend between the 0-4 and 5-
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age
group
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, with
decreased
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to 23.5% and 25% respectively.
Finally
, the proportion of young people aged 0-4
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the highest at the beginning of the study period, which was 26%.
However
, children of
this
age
were
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reached the bottom at the conclusion of the given interval, only roughly 23%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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