The graph shows children by age group as a percentage of the young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001 ]
The multi-line graph illustrates data regarding kids by
age
group among a proportion of the youngster
in the UK from 1990 to 2001. Generally speaking, it is readily apparent that the Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
overall
situation has dramatically increased in the considered time period, albeit with specific trends for each year.
First off, the percentage of the aged 10-14 faced a steep and constant decrease from 1990 to 1993, which dropped by approximately 3%, while
the other three age
groups had a lightly increase. And then
over the next four years, the age
population aged 5 to 19 was slowly rising, but at the age
of 5-9 was ranked first,
with nearly 26%.
On the other hand
, from 1997 to 2001, the proportions of 10-14 and 15-19 years old saw a moderate growth, which both increased by 1%. On the contrary
, there was a slight decline in the trend between the 0-4 and 5-9 year-old
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9-year-old
age
group
, with Fix the agreement mistake
groups
decreased
to 23.5% and 25% respectively. Replace the word
decreases
Finally
, the proportion of young people aged 0-4 which had
the highest at the beginning of the study period, which was 26%. Verb problem
was
However
, children of this
age
were
reached the bottom at the conclusion of the given interval, only roughly 23%.Unnecessary verb
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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