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compare two charts about the average houses price at England

#two #houses #price #england
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These charts give some information about the average price of
houses
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 between
years
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the years
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 1995 and 2013 in
England
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,
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london
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London
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 and 5 other regions of
England
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.
Overall
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, it can be noticed that
houses
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of
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in
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London
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is
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are
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 more expensive than other residential parts of
England
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 in both years. In 1995 the average cost of
England
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houses
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 was
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nearly
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near
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nearly
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 60000
GB
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although
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this
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 number for
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london
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London
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houses
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 was 90000
GB
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 and there was a
littele
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little
 gap
betwwen
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between
 them.
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, in 2013 there is (Tense)
remarkable
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a remarkable
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 gap between the house prices
of
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in
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London
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 and
England
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. In 2013
the
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apply
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London
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houses
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 (The verb is missing)
approximately
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were approximately
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 as twice expensive as
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England
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England's
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 average residential
regions
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region
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 which
means
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mean
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London
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 is
near
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nearly
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 380000
GB
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while
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England
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 is 160000
GB
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. For more details, the second bar chart helps to know
that
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apply
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the house
price
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prices
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 of various parts of
England
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incontrast
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in contrast
 with
London
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ion
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in
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 2013. Midlands house prices
is
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are
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 near 120000
GB
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, North is 100000
GB
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, South East is 220000, East is 175000, and
finally
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 South West is 165000. All these data show
London
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houses
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is
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are
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 much more expensive than the other cities mentioned (Proper referencing).
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