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Millions of dollars are spent on research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Overall
, it can be seen that
people
 are spending a
big
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 number of
money
 on outer
space
 every year.
This
 essay will agree that
people
 should earn
money
on
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in
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space
 and apply
in
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it in
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 a reasonable way but
people
also
 should use
money
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the money
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 to increase the quality of
living
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life
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 on
the
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apply
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Earth
. Looking at the figures in
further
 detail,
money
 which
thing
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something
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people
 can create and spend
it
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apply
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on everything and it
also
 has a big impact on the development of the
Earth
. Outer
space
 is
the
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a
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 really large
space
 and
people
 need to explore exactly to improve a
lot
 of different fields
such
 as astronomy or some subjects at school.
Besides
 that, the main
misson
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mission
 of spending
money
 on
space
 research
is find
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is to find
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 out most
of
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apply
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new things
such
 as new planets, new stars or a
lot
 of different phenomenons that
out
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are out
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 of
space
.
For example
,
people
willing
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are willing
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 to spend a huge amount of
money
 on invent rockets to pick up
to
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apply
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most of
different
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the different
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 planets.
People
 know
spend
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that spend
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 a
lot
 of
money
 on
space
 but it is the best reason
for
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to
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 develop the
Earth
to
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into
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new
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a new
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 cyberpunk and
then
people
 can gain a better lifestyle. Turning to the remaining statistics, it can be seen that others
believed
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believe
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 that
people
 should spend
money
 on the development of living standards on
Earth
. In my opinion, I think that
people
 should improve living
of
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on
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Earth
 by a
lot
 of different methods to lead to a better life for
people
 that independent
on
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of
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money
. In fact,
this
 was
a
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apply
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pretty hard
works
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work
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 for
people
 but if
people
 want to have
the
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a
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 better lifestyle,
people
 need to try hard to develop
the
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a
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 quality of
living
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life
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 on
Earth
. On the one hand,
people
 should not spend most of
money
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their money
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 on the quality of living on the
Earth
. In conclusion, outer
space
 can gain
the
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a
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 better lifestyle for
people
 if they know how to apply it in an
understand
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understandable
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 way and
people
also
 spend
money
 on living standards on
Earth
.
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