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You were unhappy about a meal in a restaurant. write a letter to the manager, tell him why you chose his restaurant, explain why you were not happy about the service and tell him what to do.

#restaurant #manager #service
Dear Manager, I am writing
this
 letter to express my
dissatisfation
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dissatisfaction
 with your establishment I am
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a constat
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constat
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constant
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 client
in
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of
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 your restaurant.
Initially
, my
last
 visit was on 12 of October which is before 2 days I
notice
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that
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apply
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a newly recruited waiter I thought he
needs
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needed
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 more training to be more polite when he
speak
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spoke
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 with customers
moreover
, he was rude
with
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to
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 us with regards to our order my friends were shocked about his reactions
therfore
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therefore
, my
freinds
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friends
 did not admire your services and staff. As I am one of the big
customer
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 I would like to
proposals
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 to take action against a new waiter give him
warning
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 as well
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also
,
deduct
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and deduct
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 one day from his salary I think he will be more
poliet
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polite
. Yours faithfully, Sarah
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task response
Ensure that all relevant points relating to why the restaurant was chosen are included in the letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize the letter with clear paragraphs to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use specific words to express your dissatisfaction and suggestions.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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