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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. What are the causes of this problem? How to overcome it?

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Making a
balance
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 between professional
life
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 and personal
life
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 is very significant to become happy. Most of the individuals can not make a
balance
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 between
life
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 and
work
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due to
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 various reasons.
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findout
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find out
 reasons behind
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 and to find suitable solutions. There are numerous factors behind
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problem
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. First of all, the most important reason
of
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for
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this
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problem
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 is long
time
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 working hours.
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,
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 frequent
over-
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overtime
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time
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 and high stress
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at
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work
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 are
another
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other
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 significant causes of imbalance between
work
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 and
life
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.
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, people who have to
work
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 long hours in the company, can not get enough
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 and energy
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to spend
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time
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 with their
familiy
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family
 and relaxation.
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, the job which is rigid or less flexible for people
also
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suffer
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this
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problem
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. Like
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, a nurse
have
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 to
present
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be present
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 in their workplace,
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 job
do
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does
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 not allow
from
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remote so they get less
time
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 to spend with their families and relatives.
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, people who can not manage their
time
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 effectively, make it hard to allocate
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 for their personal
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 and enjoyment.
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, technology plays an important role
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this
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problem
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. Mobile and internet users spend a huge
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 on it which
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create
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creates
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 a barrier to
make
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 a
balance
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 between their
life
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 and
work
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. It is crucial to overcome
this
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problem
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 for the
batterment
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betterment
 of leading
healthy
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a healthy
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 and happy
life
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.
Overcomming
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Overcoming
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this
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these
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 challenges
require
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requires
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combination
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 of strategies and commitments to making positive change in our
life
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 and professional career.
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, it is needed to achieve proper
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 management strategies and
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 a boundary between
work
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 and
life
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 so that one can maintain their
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 and
work
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 effectively.
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,
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 they
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 need to acquire
self control
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self-control
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 strategies which will help to create
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balance
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a balance
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 between
life
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 and
work
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. To summarise,
acheiving
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achieving
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work
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work-life
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life
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balance
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 requires
self awareness
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self-awareness
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,
time
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 management and clear boundaries. It is significant to understand the factors that might be controlling
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 and take steps in order to lead a
healther
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healthier
 and more
fulfilng
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fulfilling
life
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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