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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The graphic illustrates the changes the ground
floor
 of a specific building experienced over three periods since the year 1958 until
present
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Overall
, it can be seen that the
floor
 has functioned as an
office
, as an
aparment
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apartment
 and
finally
a
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as
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 a flower shop until
present
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the present
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. The
floor
initially
 was divided
in
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into
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 seven different sections and started functioning as an
office
 during the years 1958-1984. The next year, many adequations were made to make it suitable
por
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for
 living as it was converted into an apartment. The
manager
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office
 and the reception area were transformed into two bedrooms, the secretary's
office
 and the toilet were merged and a bigger bathroom with a shower was built.
Also
, the meeting room was
coverted
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covered
 into a living room.
Finally
, the
floor
 became a flower shop in 2001 and is still functioning until now.
However
, two features did not change over
the
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time; the kitchen stayed in the right corner and the entrance is still in the front area.
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