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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The graphic illustrates the changes the ground
floor
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 of a specific building experienced over three periods since the year 1958 until
present
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the present
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, it can be seen that the
floor
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 has functioned as an
office
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, as an
aparment
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apartment
 and
finally
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a
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as
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 a flower shop until
present
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the present
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. The
floor
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initially
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 was divided
in
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into
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 seven different sections and started functioning as an
office
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 during the years 1958-1984. The next year, many adequations were made to make it suitable
por
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for
 living as it was converted into an apartment. The
manager
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manager's
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office
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 and the reception area were transformed into two bedrooms, the secretary's
office
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 and the toilet were merged and a bigger bathroom with a shower was built.
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, the meeting room was
coverted
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covered
 into a living room.
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, the
floor
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 became a flower shop in 2001 and is still functioning until now.
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, two features did not change over
the
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time; the kitchen stayed in the right corner and the entrance is still in the front area.
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