people who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the most significant of these problems? How can these be tackled?

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It is said that the citizens
that
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live in big
cities
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cope with a range of troubles in their everyday
life
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. The most vital of these problems is the lack of
health
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.
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can
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be done to solve
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problem is reducing
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pollution
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.
Pollution
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is the main cause
lead
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to the decrease in
people
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's
health
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in big
cities
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. There are two main
kind
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of
pollution
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in urban, they are
air
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pollution
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and
light
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pollution
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.
Air
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pollution
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is
made
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by the exhaust of vehicles and
the
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factories.
Air
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pollution
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affects human
health
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badly by making them
to
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have lung problems like coughing or more
serious
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is
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lung cancer.
Light
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pollution
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is the result of the development of entertainment and advertisement in
cities
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, many shops use plenty of LED in order to attract their customers
as well as
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the advertisement.
Light
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pollution
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is the top reason
of
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eyes
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diseases and sleeplessness of
people
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in
cites
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cities
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.
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, all of these problems can be tackled to improve the
health
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condition of urban
people
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.
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with
the
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air
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pollution
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, we can handle
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the
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public transport to reduce the
numbers
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number
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of personal vehicles on the road by improving the facilities, adding buses and
route
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routes
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. The factory which exhausts
emission
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emissions
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should be fined to reduce the CO2 in the
air
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. To deal with
light
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pollution
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we are able to ask the
goverment
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government
to decrease the
light
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level
in
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night. In conclusion, the
health
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of
people
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in large
cities
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is endangered because of
pollution
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, we should do
somthing
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something
to cope with
this
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.

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grammatical range
The essay shows a reasonable range of grammatical structures and there are only a few errors that do not impede understanding. However, there is room for improvement in the variety and accuracy of sentence structures.

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