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Band 2.5

Some people think books are losing their importance as a source of information. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, there a numerous
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sources
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 of knowledge. Each person can choose different ways to approach the information.
However
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, books
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 still played in an important position. The diversity of
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 can help people when searching
theory
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, but
these
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 knowledge
are
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 not always
truth
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.
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, the context on a blog is usually
personal
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 aspect or experience,
therefore
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, the value of the post is not always
worth
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, even
make
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a
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 wrong sense
in
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 the issue.
In addition
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, the diverse
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 can lead to
confuse
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 about the information because there are a lot of opinions.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
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parallel
 to the development of
online
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 world, there are huge factors which can lead to distract people when reading online
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such
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advertisement
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advertisements
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. Meanwhile, the procedure to produce a
book
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 usually
abide
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abides
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 by
fundermental
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fundamental
 steps strictly. The writer is usually
master
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a master
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on
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thier
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their
the
 field, especially
on
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thier
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their
book
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 field.
Accordingly
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,
this
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 source is always
worth
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.
Moreover
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, there are almost no distracted
point
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 when reading a
book
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 because readers are concentrated
in
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 the
book
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on
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thier
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their
 hands, they only are attracted by the knowledge. In conclusion, even
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varies
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sources
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information
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of information
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 increasing nowadays, books are still
played in
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play
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 an important role. Each person should be master to choose suitable
sources
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.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting sentences that provide evidence and examples to support your claims.
coherence cohesion
Add a clearer introduction that provides an overview of the topic and your position. Also, summarize your main points in the conclusion.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely and effectively.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your grammar to ensure that your sentences are clear and accurate.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Valuable
  • Source of information
  • Losing importance
  • Rise of technology
  • Accessible
  • Different reading experience
  • Digital sources
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Critical thinking skills
  • Primary source of information
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