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The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The bar chart compares five age groups
people
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of people
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 with regard to the percentage of giving money to
charity
 for the years 1990 and 2010 in the UK.
Overall
, it can be observed from the bar chart that
middle aged
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 and elderly
people
 donate more than young
people
. Meanwhile, the proportion of
people
 under 50 decreased significantly from 1990 to 2010, the fluctuation was about 7%. In 1990, around 16% of
people
 aged between 18 and 25 gave money to
charity
,
while
 only 7% did
charity
 in
this
 age group in 2010. The proportion of
people
 engaged in
charity
 consistently increased as
people
 got older. When
people
 aged between 36 and 50,
this
 figure reached 42% in 1990 and 35% in 2010.
By contrast
, the proportion of
people
 who were over 50 increased slightly from 1990 to 2010. There was 35% of
people
 participated in
charity
 in the beginning,
whereas
 about 39% of
people
 aged between 51 and 65 did
charity
 in 2010. For
people
 aged over 65,
this
 percentage declined to 32% in 1990 and 35% respectively in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, charity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable giving
  • demographic analysis
  • economic factors
  • social awareness
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • donation patterns
  • functioning and effectiveness
  • speculate
  • future trends
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