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The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The bar chart compares five age groups
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people
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of people
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 with regard to the percentage of giving money to
charity
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 for the years 1990 and 2010 in the UK.
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, it can be observed from the bar chart that
middle aged
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 and elderly
people
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 donate more than young
people
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. Meanwhile, the proportion of
people
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 under 50 decreased significantly from 1990 to 2010, the fluctuation was about 7%. In 1990, around 16% of
people
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 aged between 18 and 25 gave money to
charity
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,
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 only 7% did
charity
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 in
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 age group in 2010. The proportion of
people
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 engaged in
charity
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 consistently increased as
people
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 got older. When
people
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 aged between 36 and 50,
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 figure reached 42% in 1990 and 35% in 2010.
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, the proportion of
people
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 who were over 50 increased slightly from 1990 to 2010. There was 35% of
people
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 participated in
charity
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 in the beginning,
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 about 39% of
people
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 aged between 51 and 65 did
charity
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 in 2010. For
people
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 aged over 65,
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 percentage declined to 32% in 1990 and 35% respectively in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, charity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable giving
  • demographic analysis
  • economic factors
  • social awareness
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • donation patterns
  • functioning and effectiveness
  • speculate
  • future trends
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