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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university .Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university .Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the output of the student's survey in five categories (Technical quality,
Print
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resources
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, Electronic
Resources
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,
Range
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 of
modules
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 offered, and building
facilitities
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facilities
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in
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on
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 a campus. The survey was taken in three different years (2000, 2005 and 2010) and the data is presented by
percentage
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. In general, most categories showed an
increase
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 from 2000 to 2010, except for
Range
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 of Module Offer and Building Facilities.
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Print
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The print
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 Resource category had the highest rating
percentage
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while
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Range
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the Range
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 of
Modules
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 was the lowest. From 2000 to 2005, Electronic
Resources
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 showed a significant
increase
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 of almost 30%,
while
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Print
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Resources
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 experienced
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a slightly
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slightly
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increase
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 from 87% to 89%.
Conversely
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,
Technical
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the Technical
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 resource and
Range
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 of
Modules
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 category experienced a decrease below 5%.
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, the rating of Building Facilities stayed
same
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the same
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 with
total
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the total
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percentage
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 of 77%. From 2005 to 2010, Electronic
Resources
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 and Technical
Resource
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Resources
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 had an
increase
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 of around 8% and 6% each.
Otherwise
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,
Print
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Resources
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 and
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Range
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the Range
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 of
Modules
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 show a decrease of around 1
until
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to
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 3%. Meanwhile, the rating of Building Facilities still
stay
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stays
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same
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the same
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 as
2005
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in 2005
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, with
total
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the total
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percentage
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 of 77%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words print, resources, range, modules, percentage, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • results
  • university
  • 2000
  • 2005
  • 2010
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • trends
  • responses
  • time
  • significance
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