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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rther than secondary school. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your experiences.

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There is much debate about whether it is useful to introduce foreign
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 lessons at primary schools or whether the considerable investment of educational resources in terms of professional teachers and time lost to other subjects outweighs the advantages of early
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 learning. In many
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 I believe it is vital that
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 learning starts as early as possible in a child's life.
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 important to consider is the environment where the child lives. Many children are raised in countries where speaking more than
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language
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 norm. Even within
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 there are variations in the number of languages spoken. Children in immigrant communities meet the daily challenge of being educated in a
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language
 which is not their mother tongue. Many of them succeed in being bi-lingual
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language
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 may have skills which are more developed than in the other
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 new
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 at a younger age are able to speak it with a native speaker accent. Research seems to indicate that older learners have more difficulty distinguishing sounds in a foreign
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 than those who learn it at a younger age. There are some children who have problems
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 literacy in their native
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, those who suffer from dyslexia may find it stressful to try to learn to write in a foreign
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. Some might argue that it is more important for young people to be able to use
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language
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 competently, rather than two languages less well.
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, in my own experience learning a foreign
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 can give an insight into how
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 works and help with an understanding of how its
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 works. Learning at primary school can be a less pressured environment than later on in school. There can be opportunities to learn through games and songs, giving the child
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 that
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language
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 leads to a positive attitude which is an excellent foundation for consolidation at secondary school.
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Task Response
Ensure that all parts of the essay prompt are addressed directly and consistently throughout the essay. Provide a clear opinion on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of introducing foreign language lessons at primary school.
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Maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the essay. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas are connected coherently.
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Expand your range of vocabulary by using more precise and varied language. Consider using academic vocabulary and collocations to enhance your essay.
Grammatical Range
Work on improving the accuracy of your grammar. Pay attention to verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure.

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