The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make omparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make omparisons where relevant.
The bar chart below demonstrates the electricity usage and production in several countries which have the highest ranks in 2014.
According to
available data, China has the first position and the United States is next.
Moreover
, these two illustrate a great conflict with Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and the Republic of Korea. Broadly speaking, all the ten nations except Germany, produced service more than they needed. As it was mentioned before there was a significant distinction between figures of the
first,
second,
and alternatives.
However
, in Germany, consumption exceeded production.
Additionally
, The third place was related to Russia where
the
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both figures did not differ noticeably.
In addition
, China
due to
its massive population, conducted the majority and Korea occupied the tenth spot on the list which was dippest.
To sum up
, both communities that consisted of a large population performed the majority of consumption and production of electricity altogether.
Although
, other countries did not perform as much as the two mentioned countries.
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  • bar chart
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • leading country
  • ranking differences
  • significant gaps
  • regional trends
  • sustainability
  • energy efficiency
  • renewable energy sources
  • top ten countries
  • implications
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