The two diagrams illustrate the main parts of a hot air balloon and indicate how it ascends and descends in flight. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two diagrams illustrate the main parts of a hot air balloon and indicate how it ascends and descends in flight.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are
two
pictures that illustrate how an
air
balloon
ascends and descends depending on its structure. The
air
balloon
is constructed with a
balloon
envelope
hanging a blanket for passengers. In the blanket,
two
gas tanks are put on the floor linked burners at the junction of the
envelope
and the blanket.
Besides
, there is a
valve
cord inside the
envelope
connected to the
valve
on the top of the
envelope
. When the
air
balloon
ascends, the valves of
two
gas tanks are opened and the
valve
on the
envelope
is closed. With burners opened, the
envelope
will expand because hot
air
is blown into it, pulling the
air
balloon
to the sky.
By contrast
, when the
air
balloon
descends,
two
gas tanks and burners are closed, and a person pulls the
valve
cord to open the
valve
on the top so hot
air
will be released through it.
As a result
, the
air
balloon
will lose the force to rise and back to the land.
Overall
, the
air
balloon
is a complex machine and its movement is predominantly decided by the quantity of hot
air
in its
envelope
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • envelope
  • burner
  • gondola
  • ascend
  • descend
  • vent
  • contract
  • expand
  • dense
  • skirt
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