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The chart below shows the number of male and female research student studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009

The chart below shows the number of male and female research student studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009
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 illustrates information about
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 of genders in 6 science subjects at a UK university in 2009 As
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can be seen,
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biology and physics
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 had the highest points at 240 and 220 respectively.
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Medicine
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a
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twice
of
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the size of veterinary
medicine
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 which was just under 100 students.
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,
Astranomy
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Astronomy
 and Geology had
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 quantity of
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researchers which was 150
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, the highest rate of male and female participants were
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Biology
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the Biology
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 sphere.
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, men overweighted almost in all subjects
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 Veterinary
Medicine
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to
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the women, it can be highlighted that in Biology they got their pick.
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Veterinart
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Veterinary
Medicine
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 had the twice amount of geology students where
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 more than 60 were enrolling.
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Medicine
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 had roughly
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30 participants fewer.
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, the lowest rate showed physics only with 40-50 women research students.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, nevertheless".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medicine with synonyms.
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