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Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree

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it is believed by some people that to enhance and improve standards of livelihood on our
Earth
.
This
writter
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writer
 agrees with
this
 statement and will explain
in
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 the following essay.
Firstly
, there still be many pressing factors on our
Earth
's development.
For instance
, in many developing nations people are suffering from poverty, poor healthcare facilities, and unemployment.
Therefore
, it is vital to put money
on
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 education and health
service
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services
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. It is a common norm to state that people are settling
in
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 a knowledge-based society.
Secondly
, it is more convenient for us to solve it because we are already living on it .
The
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 existence on
earth
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Earth
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 is reported thousands of years back and we have explored all the physical, chemical,
biological
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and biological
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 aspects of it. Humans are the main culprits for polluting it and disturbing the whole ecological balance.
Howerver
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However
, with protection laws and policies, we can alleviate the disturbances created by us. In conclusion, it is better
improve
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 our standard of
livineg
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living
 as it is convenient to save our our
earth
.

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