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Millions of dollars are spent on spacer search every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Millions of dollars are
focusing
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 on outer
space
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research
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 every year. Many individuals believe that the living
of
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standards
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 on
Earth
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 should be
improving
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improved
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 by
spent
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spending
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 money on it. I totally agree with
this
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 statement and I will give my opinion in
this
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 essay. It is vital to understand that, people have
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the necessities
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necessities
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necessity
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 to explore the world so they start to reach
the
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space
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 and
forgot
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forget
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 the living standard on
Earth
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.
Due to
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 the fact that, when we
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spend
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 a lot of expenditure on
space
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research
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, it will make the living
standards
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 on
Earth
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 very let-down.
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, it will
make
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 an effect on the income tax, it may
be increase
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be increased
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 because they need
cost
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 to do the
research
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 and it will lead to market stock.
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,
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cost
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the cost
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 of
plan
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the plan
a plan
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 of
space
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research
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 must
be decrease
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 to balance the
cost
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 of living
standards
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 on
Earth
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. Another key component of the case for spending
cost
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 to
developing
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develop
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 a standard living of
people
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for people
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 on
Earth
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. It should be self-evident that when we
spent
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spend
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 the expenditure on living
standard
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standards
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 it can make people’s life better. In
this
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 situation,
spent
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spending
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 money will
gain
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give
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 opportunities to people who need
job
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jobs
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 to work and
the
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apply
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don’t need to deal with the problem
income
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of income
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 tax increases or
decrease
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decreases
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 or
about
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apply
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the
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inflation. It must be
also
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 noted that spending on living
standard
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standards
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was
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slow
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slows
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 down the percentages of homelessness or unemployment.
Thus
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, it can be seen that spending on
space
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research
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or
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and
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 standard living
both
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of
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apply
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it
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is very important
on
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for
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human
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humans
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. So, in my point of view, it
need
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needs
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to be
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be balance
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, one half for
space
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research
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 and another for improving the
standards
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living
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of living
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 on
Earth
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, it will make
human’s
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human
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 life better.
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