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Millions of dollars are spent on spacer search every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Millions of dollars are
focusing
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spent
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 on outer
space
research
 every year. Many individuals believe that the living
of
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standards
 on
Earth
 should be
improving
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improved
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 by
spent
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spending
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 money on it. I totally agree with
this
 statement and I will give my opinion in
this
 essay. It is vital to understand that, people have
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the necessities
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necessities
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necessity
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 to explore the world so they start to reach
the
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space
 and
forgot
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 the living standard on
Earth
.
Due to
 the fact that, when we
spent
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spend
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 a lot of expenditure on
space
research
, it will make the living
standards
 on
Earth
 very let-down.
As a consequence
, it will
make
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have
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 an effect on the income tax, it may
be increase
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be increased
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 because they need
cost
 to do the
research
 and it will lead to market stock.
Therefore
,
cost
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the cost
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 of
plan
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a plan
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 of
space
research
 must
be decrease
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 to balance the
cost
 of living
standards
 on
Earth
. Another key component of the case for spending
cost
 to
developing
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develop
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 a standard living of
people
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for people
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 on
Earth
. It should be self-evident that when we
spent
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spend
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 the expenditure on living
standard
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standards
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 it can make people’s life better. In
this
 situation,
spent
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spending
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 money will
gain
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give
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 opportunities to people who need
job
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jobs
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 to work and
the
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don’t need to deal with the problem
income
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of income
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 tax increases or
decrease
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decreases
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 or
about
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apply
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the
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inflation. It must be
also
 noted that spending on living
standard
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standards
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was
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slow
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slows
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 down the percentages of homelessness or unemployment.
Thus
, it can be seen that spending on
space
research
or
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and
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 standard living
both
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of
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it
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is very important
on
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for
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human
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humans
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. So, in my point of view, it
need
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needs
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to be
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be balance
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be balanced
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, one half for
space
research
 and another for improving the
standards
living
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of living
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 on
Earth
, it will make
human’s
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human
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 life better.

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