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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Online
education
 is gaining much popularity in the contemporary world.
Although
 it is considered by many that
due to
 the vast advantages of online learning offline
education
 will diminish soon,
while
 others think traditional learning systems cannot be replaced. I
also
 opine that offline
education
 cannot be replaced in the future.
However
,
this
 essay will discuss both points of view. On the one hand, many believe, that on-campus
education
 Cannot be replaced because research and practical lessons cannot be imparted online, and I agree.
In other words
, online platforms can only provide theoretical knowledge,
while
 physical classes can provide both.
Moreover
, the traditional
education
 system facilitates knowledge and idea-sharing that cannot be provided virtually. In order to become a dentist,
for instance
, students must go to dental colleges, because it is not possible to acquire
this
 skill virtually.
Likewise
, there are a plethora of skills which require practical training.
Thus
, it is proved that the requirements of on-campus
education
 will be universal.
On the other hand
, it is assumed by a few individuals that, because of the benefits like accessibility and inexpensiveness, online platforms as a means of
education
 will replace the other completely.
However
, it is, in fact, true that, for information and technology-related
education
, online classes are pretty convenient.
Besides
, many Arts/ Humanities related
education
 programmes can be accommodated within online courses. A recent study conducted by study.com found that students prefer learning about history, arts, and cultural-related subjects 70% more on online means business, finance, and engineering-related courses. Thereby, even though virtual classrooms are better options for many branches of
education
, I can't entirely agree with the concept that physical Classrooms will be dissolved as practical skills can only be enhanced through them. In conclusion, I agree entirely that despite having many benefits virtual Courses, and on-campus studies will continue to lead as the most reliable and effective means of learning.
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task response
Make sure to clearly state your opinion on whether online education will replace traditional education or not. This will help strengthen your argument throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is generally well-structured and organized. However, try to further develop and expand your main points to provide a more comprehensive analysis of both views.
lexical resource
Your vocabulary and use of language in the essay are appropriate and varied. Continue to use a wide range of vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively.
grammatical range
Your grammatical range and accuracy are generally good. However, pay attention to sentence structure and punctuation to improve the overall clarity of your writing.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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