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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office.

#countries #companies #people #work #home #office
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Nowadays most companies are allowed to
work
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 from home after the Corona pandemic. Many employees are taking benefits of these facilities. But some people are still searching for a job. In
this
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, I am going examine
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 question from both points of view and
then
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 give my opinion. On the one side, working from home
a
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lot of benefits to both the company and employees.
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, employees have a chance to spend time with family members and save own their time from
traffice
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traffic
 and other hurdles and companies save lots of
costs
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such
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 as plant running
costs
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, food
costs
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 and electricity
costs
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.
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, as per the report of BBC News, Google company save $100 billion of cost in 2022 through
work
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 form.
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,
in
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this
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 time automation is more famous in various fields.
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, people are
loosing
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own
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their own
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 jobs because it helps with 4 to
5 person
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work
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 done by the single system easily and
no
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with no
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 need for extra manpower.
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, as per the survey
of
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by
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 Times of India, 10
lakhs
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person are
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people
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 lost
jobs
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their jobs
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 after
implemention
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implementing
 chat GPT in various sectors because of Chat GPT.
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, Jobs
demends
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demands
 are less than
perivous
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previous
pervious
perilous
 days. In conclusion,
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work
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 from is
good
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straightgies
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strategy
to reduced
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for reducing
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overheads
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 of a company
and
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apply
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I know automation is important for us but in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it
is use
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 in that
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work place
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workplace
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 so their people
are not feel
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do not feel
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safety
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and dangerous
for
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apply
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them
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apply
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like
as
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apply
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electricity and col mines. Chat GPT has
serveral
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several
 benefits, easily
do
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 the difficult activity with
solution
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solutions
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. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 the governments suggest to companies only limited purpose of used
automtion
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automation
 in
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 area.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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