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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom form January to June

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom form January to June
#requests #information #tourist #office #kingdom #form #january #june
The
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line graph
 demonstrates the
request
 for
information
 at a tourist office in the United Kingdom for the first six
month
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 of
given
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a given
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 year.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in person
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request
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requests
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 increased from least to most common over the period,
beside
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telephone
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the telephone
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 which
was
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also
 went up.
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information
 requested by letter/email was dramatically reduced through 6 months.
At
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 the beginning,
in
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in-person
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person
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person,
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information
request
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requests
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 were the lowest of all three
catergories
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categories
 at approximately 420. It went up smoothly to the end and
reach
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 a peak of 1850. In comparison with the way before,
telephone
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the telephone
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 was the most popular in January at about 850.
Although
 the
information
 collected by telephone
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 to
fell
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fall
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 slightly in the next month, it
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 the jumped trend.
At
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 the end, it rose to 1600.
In contrast
 with
two
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catergories
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categories
 above, the written
request
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requests
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was
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sharply decreased over the period. In January, it was
at
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 the second position with 790. After that, it dropped to the lowest point at about 390. There was not
fluatuated
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fluctuated
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 till the end.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words request, information with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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