In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

It is true that these days, companies insist that their
products
are new and different to the others for several reasons and they
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on
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this
issue in their advertisements.
Also
, I believe that it is a kind of positive development for a variety of reasons which will be discussed in the following essay. Nowadays, employers make every effort to distinguish their
products
from
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and they show it in their commercials.
Firstly
, the number of the same product is too high that it is hard for people to decide to buy which one.
Also
, it is a problem for the companies and their advertisement team to compete with other businesses to sell
such
a product and persuade
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society to pay for that.
For instance
, a carpet factory in Iran
advertise
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that if an
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individual
can find a carpet cheaper than their
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, they will impose a fine
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that customer.
Secondly
, because of the similarity of
products
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and
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trust
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an
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for people whenever they want to buy something.
Nevertheless
, companies and their
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group should emphasise on differences
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their production and their advantages.
Finally
, managers should use every creativity in their announcements to show the advantages and positive points of their produce in order to encourage the community to give them a chance and buy their
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.
This
way of propaganda
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seems to me a beneficial development because of its effect on people's minds.
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an
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to buy
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stuff, he/she
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to
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all aspects of
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produce
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product
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such
as the colour, material, quality, and even
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ease of use.
In addition
,
although
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of all
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products
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similar, they have slight differences which
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them from each other.
Nonetheless
, these small differences can affect
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consumers'
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. In conclusion, businesses are focusing on the different points of their outputs to encourage the community and
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them to buy their
products
,
This
kind of announcement has several good benefits for them.
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  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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