The movements of people from the villages to the cities for work has caused a lots of problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?
In
todays
world majority of the population Change to a genitive case
today's
living
in the Wrong verb form
lives
cities
. Despite the
knowing the number is getting bigger Correct article usage
apply
that
Correct word choice
apply
people
living in the cities
moving from villages to the centers has
Change the verb form
have
a
massive trouble. Remove the article
apply
This
essay will examine the main causes
of living in a city
and came from suburb
and possible solutions to Fix the agreement mistake
suburbs
this
problem.
The two main causes
of humans goes
to the Wrong verb form
going
cities
for working are traffic jams and makes people
nervous. When jobseekers start to live in a big city
brings lots of problems
. When everyone tries to arrive their
workplace at the same Change preposition
at their
time
it makes roads more crowded. For example
, most of the population use
public transportation during the day and at certain times there is a possibility Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
to
not Change preposition
of
find
a seat Wrong verb form
finding
in
the trams or metros. Change preposition
on
Also
, generally
social activities Add a comma
generally,
such
as concerts, theaters
Correct word choice
and theaters
has
limited tickets and Change the verb form
have
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
gets
sold out as soon as possible.
The Correct subject-verb agreement
get
problems
because of the crowdness makes
Change the verb form
make
people
angry. While
try
to Wrong verb form
trying
going
Change the verb
go
home
after the
work employees get stuck in Correct article usage
apply
a
traffic and it Remove the article
apply
is consuming
their free Wrong verb form
consumes
time
. In order to that
, it Add a missing verb
do that
causes
less
creative society in the long run. Spending Correct article usage
a less
a
free Correct article usage
apply
time
on the road to the way of
Change preposition
apply
home
individuals become less energetic and wants
to lie for the rest of the day. Correct subject-verb agreement
want
Thus
, living in big
Add an article
a big
city
often
hard for Add a missing verb
is often
people
and cause
massive Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
problems
.
Some possible solutions to this
problems
are Fix the agreement mistake
problem
offers
Wrong verb form
offering
a remote jobs
and Correct the article-noun agreement
remote jobs
a remote job
promote
village life among Wrong verb form
promoting
people
. Especially developments in technology makes
Change the verb form
make
possible
for Correct pronoun usage
it possible
people
to work from home
. By working from home
we can reduce the consuming
Replace the word
consumption
time
from traffic and make investment
Fix the agreement mistake
investments
on
more social activities. Change preposition
in
According to
this
, we need to encourage recruiters to give a chance to employees does not have to come office every week days
. Correct your spelling
weekdays
This
way, people
will be more happy and motivated while
working.
To conclude
, people
's moving to cities
from sub-urban areas creates difficulties. However
, we significantly lessen the problems
causes
Wrong verb form
caused
because
of who move Change preposition
by
for
Change preposition
to
a
work in a Remove the article
apply
city
by promoting remote jobs and enlighthening
recruiters about Correct your spelling
enlightening
this
problem.Submitted by mervve.varli on
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