Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but others believe that they should not go to school until they are older. Discuss both these views anf give your opinion.
Nowadays, most
of
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apply
the
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apply
people
thinks
early Change the verb form
think
education
helps to improve the
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apply
kids
knowledge but some Change to a genitive case
kid's
kids'
people
suggests
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suggest
childrens
need to enjoy their childhood.In Correct your spelling
children
the
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this
essay
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essay,
i
am going to discuss Change the capitalization
I
about
early Remove the preposition
apply
education
pros and cons.
Currently, parents are willing Change noun form
education's
join
their Add the particle
to join
kids
at the
school Correct article usage
apply
to
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at
their
early age because they will learn easily.Marketing companies brainwash the Change the word
an
parents
minds about Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
the
early Correct article usage
apply
education
and it is creating
some social status.Parents are happy to share others about their Wrong verb form
creates
kids
pre
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apply
level
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pre-level
education
standard
.Fix the agreement mistake
standards
For example
, in 1990 india
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India
don't
have any Wrong verb form
didn't
education
at the age of three but now we have a lot of classes.
Secondly
, Some people
argue early education
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is no
no
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not
need
for Replace the word
needed
kids
because they need to spend quality of
time with their Change preposition
apply
family
.It will help to grow children with love and care but now Fix the agreement mistake
families
kids
faced
a lot of stress during their studies .Wrong verb form
face
Due to
that competition
they Add a comma
competition,
forced
to do activities without their happiness.Add a missing verb
are forced
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, in india
most Change the capitalization
India
of
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apply
pre school
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pre-school
syllabus
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syllabi
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are similarly
similarly
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similar
like
to Change preposition
apply
year
1 syllabus.
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the year
Coclusion
, Correct your spelling
Conclusion
education
helps to improve people
lifestyle but too early Change noun form
people's
education
affect their health and rush in
the Change preposition
into
education
competition.Submitted by keyarthi on
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task response
You need to provide a more balanced discussion of both views in your essay. Currently, your essay is biased towards the idea of early education being unnecessary.
coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
Your choice of vocabulary is limited and there are several instances of incorrect word usage. Try to expand your vocabulary and use words accurately.
grammatical range
There are several grammatical errors in your essay, including incorrect verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Review your grammar and try to improve your sentence construction.
Fully explain your ideas
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