Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such ad cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To extent do you agree or disagree.

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academic success and
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examination
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. So, some people agree with that idea.
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others disagree with that. In
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will draw my personal conclusion. On the one hand, if
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have some reasons. First of all, the family and friends should do that to make a strong relationship because they will spend over
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, they will feel comfortable when they do the
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they will be
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to finish that because they work with people they love
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besides
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disagree with that idea
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have a lot of reasons.
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should focus on academic success and passing examinations but
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to learn some
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will love
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to
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but if they
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there. In conclusion, after analysis
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family and
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the student
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different
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agree with
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home and that
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very well the
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think
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the government should make
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for the teachers and parents
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they teach the
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about cookery or dreemaking and
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, that
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will be higher because all
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will join there.
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